Sentence Flow

GOAL: The reader should get to the end of your sentence, not have to reread anything, and know exactly what you mean.

Say it as simply and directly as possible.



Be CONVERSATIONAL–avoid an overly formal tone.

*note – never use the word “you” in academic writing (essays or research papers). Third-person (he, she, it, they etc.) is usually best, although first person (I) might be acceptable depending on the situation.


1 “At the time in the near future that we receive your check in the amount of $31.40, we will quickly forward you your order.” Becomes: “When we get your check for $31.40, we’ll quickly ship your order”

2 “In actuality, the overwhelming net effect of the company’s policy has been an overall increase in gross capital output.” Becomes:”This policy has forced the company to spend more money.”

3 “We are fully cognizant of your utilization of the facility.” Becomes: “We know you use the gym.”


Rewrite the following sentences so that they have good flow.

(You may work alone, but I would suggest working with a partner on this assignment.)

  1. The cost as well as taste vary between the two.
  2. Do not become content in leading your life as second class citizens.
  3. As soon as the whistle sounded the man’s day is over while women hear that same bell but the realization for them is that it is time for them to start the second aspect of their lives.
  4. It is also the inner strength inside a person.
  5. In the article “Economy,” an excerpt from the world famous book Walden, the author, Henry David Thoreau attempts to explain to his readers a key theory to which he writes of.
  6. Thoreau did not live up to the potentials that he was capable of living up to.
  7. If you do not have money then you cannot do things making your life therefore limited.
  8. I thought it was easy to save my work as well as bringing it back up the next time I needed it.